ENGLISH • PERSUASIVE WRITING
Make Every Detail Help
Today you will help plan a quiet lunchtime zone.
You can point, speak or write.
- Read the lesson goal with an adult.
- Say: “I am ready to make my idea clear.”
- Press Next.
Finished when: You know that today’s idea is a quiet lunchtime zone.
VAGUE
place
↓ add useful detail ↓
quiet lunchtime zone beside the library
STEP 1 • KNOW THE IDEA
What change are we asking for?
Our school should make
a quiet lunchtime zone.
STEP 2 • COMPARE
Which sentence is easier to picture?
Choose one sentence.
STEP 3 • THREE JOBS
Useful detail has a job
Our school should make
a quiet lunchtime zone beside the library
for
students who need a break from the noisy oval,
so they can
return to class calm and ready to learn.
STEP 4 • HEAD NOUN
Find the main noun
The head noun is the main person, place or thing.
STEP 5 • USEFUL OR EMPTY?
Does the detail teach us something?
STEP 6 • BUILD A REASON
Who needs the quiet zone?
Choose one group. Then explain why it fits the quiet-zone idea.
The quiet lunchtime zone would give [which students?]…
STEP 7 • BUILD A REASON
What could the quiet zone help them do?
Choose one action that matches a quiet place.
…a calmer place to [do what?]…
STEP 8 • BUILD A REASON
When would they use it?
Choose the time that matches a lunchtime zone.
…[when?].
STEP 9 • READ THE WHOLE REASON
Do all the parts work together?
The quiet lunchtime zone would give
[which students?]
a calmer place to
[do what?]
[when?].
Choose one answer on Steps 6, 7 and 8 first.
STEP 10 • WRITE
Build a short proposal
1. Our school should make a quiet lunchtime zone.
2. Use your reason from the last slide.
3. The quiet zone could be beside the library.
4. It could have two sturdy benches.
5. Please try this helpful change.
STEP 11 • CHECK
Check that every detail helps
Click each check after you find it in your writing.
FINISH
Tell what your detail does
My useful detail is:
________________________________________It helps the reader know:
________________________________________